Sunday, July 8, 2018

BAD COPYWRITING IN LOCAL AD


The ad above was produced by RoboVac;  The distributor of a robotic vacuum cleaner. The ad, which has now been taken down, has been described as “insensitive”, “demeaning,” and “very disturbing to the feeling of the people and nation” by Indonesia.


SUGGESTION FOR THE NEW COPYWRITING FOR ROBOVAC:

Clean starts here.
No more heavy vacuums. No more hassle with a cord.
We are your key to clean.
   
Too often I read or see ads that, sadly, someone paid a lot of money to produce, and sound ‘ad-like,’ but make no sense at all. Sometimes clarity is sacrificed in the name of supposed creativity. This should not have to be a choice. Being clear means being truthful, authentic, accurate and understood. Settle for nothing less.

The ad above was produced by Kopi Kelapa Dara company and published on December 2016.
SUGGESTION FOR THE NEW COPYWRITING FOR KOPI KELAPA DARA:
Naturally effective

The instant you need help
Natural relief, instantly

While it may not be appropriate for a medically-based topic, other X-rated content can be fun, if you let it. When you get ready to write something sexy, don’t be afraid to think outside the box but not too much you exaggerate things.

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BAD COPYWRITING IN LOCAL AD The ad above was produced by RoboVac ;  The distributor of a robotic vacuum cleaner. T he ad, which has now...